Koi (Working Title) [loli, incest, rape, expansion, lesbian]

Story by ddvz

So, I started writing this story about 6 months (maybe even a year) ago. I finished the whole chapter and proofread it many times, but I never wanted to publish anything until I was finished. I was right not to, as I didn't start working on it again until very recently. I reworked a lot of things about it. When I first started writing fanfiction, my style was extremely verbose and almost experimental at points. Later on when I started writing smut in my free time to fill out the empty pages in my notebooks, my style became much more streamlined and conversational. Since then, every time I've tried a proper foray into erotica things have pretty much devolved into somewhat stinted continuities containing long scenes of nothing but expansion and/or sex. And while that's fine, it's quite limiting by nature if you start out wanting to do something longer or deeper. All this being said, this attempt is largely a hybridization of all three styles.

I reworked a lot of the first chapter to add in a greater range of vocabulary, more clearly describe who is speaking and how characters feel, cut out or rewrite scenes that felt subpar, excessive, or unclear; and provide a better setup for what I ultimately wanted to write. This being the case, even after multiple proofreadings, I feel like all of this may have severely detracted from the story's natural flow. I may end up making minor or even major changes to it at some point. I haven't waited enough time to do a read-through of the other chapters with fresh eyes, and chapter five is currently on hiatus, until I decide exactly where I want to take the characters (there are so many things I want them to do). I'll probably upload chapters weekly, even if I feel satisfied with one earlier. Hopefully this consistency will make it easier to keep working on the story. I got some inspiration from a story where a little herm and her best friend referred to her cock as a separate entity. I can't remember which one it was or who the author was, but I found that plot device incredibly hot. Thank you mystery person; I'll probably do a search and give you real credit soon.

8:24 PM 3/7/2017: I reworked a number of things in the first chapter to improve the flow and diminish the forced stintedness at parts. I also changed some scenes and dialogue, and added in more thought bubbles. This is the fourth draft, and I'm fairly confident in this iteration, but there may be more changes in the future. I've decided a week is too long, so I'll probably update with new chapters twice a week instead. Reading through the other's now, before I implement my skeleton for chapters five and six.

:204:

"Here Saya, have some of mine. I'm not feeling very hungry."

Saya shook her head, "But I'm already full..." the six year old pouted, staring down at her distended stomach.

"But you're a growing girl, Saya! You need to eat to grow big and strong!" And with that her older sister began to spoon the remainder of her own portion into Saya's mouth. The stew had once tasted good, but it now it tasted briny and bitter. Each mouthful, once a delight, now an arduous chore. Saya had already finished her own meal and was now forced to finish over half of Koi's as well.

After dinner came dessert, and Saya knew that she wouldn't be leaving the kitchen table without eating at least two slices of cake. Her belly, already taut and red, forced her shirt over her midriff. Koi gently massaged the stressed skin with one hand while spoon-feeding Saya with the other. Saya didn't understand why, but this always made her "Snake" grow long and hard, and her balls would swell round and full. Koi's hand slipped down from her belly and slowly began to sprint up and down her other distended anatomy. This part always felt very good, so Saya closed her eyes and focused on the pleasure rather than the pain of being too full.

When the cake was gone, Koi disappeared underneath the table completely. Koi's two hands grasped resolutely, rhythmically moving up and down, while her mouth suckled on the testicles below. Koi desperately rolled the two golf balls inside her mouth, at times violently yanking down as if to forcibly tear off Saya's scrotum. Each yank caused Saya to buck upwards violently and release the cutest of yelps.

Saya's leg strength disappeared as her entire lower body tensed and spasmed. Precum erupted from the angry purple Snake's mouth, slickly coating both it's own body and Koi's hands as they continued to trace up and down. It seemed larger than ever, approaching seven inches as it attempted to eclipse Saya's overfed paunch.

Just as Saya neared the brink of true bliss, Koi retreated and fit her mouth around the writhing appendage. Her cheeks pulled inwards as she formed a veritable vacuum-seal around it, her hands squeezing and tapping the swollen

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